More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In recent years obesity has become major health concern across the world. Few believe that inflating the price of fast foods shall curtail the consumption and others considers this as a myth. In my opinion there is no real relation between increased price and lower intake, hence this can b solved by creating awareness and developing sense of individual responsibility towards health.

Firstly, people these days are ready to pay hefty amount on food to keep their taste buds happy, irrespective of the fluctuation in the price of such foods. Today several Global food giants are setting up their store across the world as a result this has provided ease of access and variety of dishes in the menu. For instance MCdonalds, Pizza Hut etc sell their products at high cost, still we could witness majority people queueing up for their turn. This supports the view that price has no influence on consumption of this fattening foods.

However there are few instance which has led to reduction in consumption by Increasing taxes on such products. The Tax rate are usually high on such eateries, this creates a sense of avoidance amongst consumers and resultingly, they curb their intake. As per the latest survey conducted by GST Department, with an increase of Tax by 10%, there is sudden dip in the sales of fast joint companies products in rural and Tier 2 cities. This seems to be effective but may not have impact across all the location and individuals.

In Conclusion, to break this habit there is need of creating the wave of awareness amongst individuals and its negative impact on the health rather than increasing the cost.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, may, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1345.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92673992674 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55793607008 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1538655085 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.083333333 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167631787298 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606025361386 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349348819242 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0926106885282 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371884710332 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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