More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people think a solution can be to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that obesity gains more popularity in today’s society and raising the price of unhealthy foods can be a solution for this proclivity. There are good arguments both for and against this view, but I believe it depends on different reasons.
I completely agree with the idea that increasing the price of greasy foods is one of the solutions to the obesity problem. The first prominent justification is that if raising the expenditure of unhealthy foods is applied, it will decrease the demand for them which prevents the cause of obesity. Secondly, because of higher price of fattening foods than healthy ones, it attracts people to spend more budget on purchasing healthy foods. Finally, there would be a case that increasing the price of unhealthy food is not only affecting end-users but also other distributions in the catering industry. For example, HoReCa, an abbreviation of hotel, restaurant and café, is a core distribution channel which will be heavily impacted by this policy.
However, I believe that there are other actions that governments could take to address the problem described above. The first solution is imposing on unhealthy materials which are used to make greasy foods. The second solution is that the more budget for promoting healthy food industry such as increasing the subsidies for farmers with the quality standard is spent, the more fatty foods are created. Last but not least, forbidding the advertisement for unhealthy foods aiming at children is one of the solutions to this problem. For instance, as soon as the policy of banning adverts in America was introduced, it helped decline the obesity rates of children aged 3 to 11 by 18%.
In conclusion, while reasons can be given to justify that pushing up the cost of consuming fatty foods can be a solution for increasing obese residents, I believe this is not the only remedy for this inclination.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06349206349 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77510801408 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51746031746 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 500.4 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4016262935 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.692307692 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188713244719 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709859432175 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656846186779 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124928206433 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287779284657 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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