Most country aim to improve the standard of living through economic development, but most of the important values are lost.Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

Most country aim to improve the standard of living through economic development, but most of the important values are lost.
Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Many nations try their best to develop the living standard which is directly linked to the economic development, while nearly all crucial values vanish due to this development. Although this period causes many significant drawbacks, I put down to the fact that the benefits are greater. This essay will first discuss the negative side of the economic development, then it will point out the bright side of this issue.

There is no denying that there is a world of problems being able to be anticipated when a country is more developed. One fact is that the number of working hours would be extended due to the huge amount of work that needs to be accomplished. Then the parents will have to be tied up at the workplace and find hard to let their hair down when getting home. This would lead to the fewer hours that parents could spend with their children. Consequently, the children will be brought up without enough care of their parents and tend to copy bad acts from their peers. Another worrying fact is that people would be more indifferent while they are living in such fast-paced life. People are easily enraged and could throw a tantrum due to all the strain they have to suffer.

On the other hand, we can obviously see the benefits from the economic development. High living standard is the most obvious advantage. A wide range of healthcare centers, schools and restaurants are few examples of high standard of living, which would definitely make citizens’ life much more easy and comfortable. Furthermore, a lot more opportunities will be provided to the citizens, for examples the chance to get a job for the unemployed, or a chance to access many range of entertainments from enjoying a trip to trying different tasty and unique food.

In a nutshell, I certainly believe this process needs to be focused on more on account of many opportunities provided. The economic development only causes trivial negative problems compared to many advantages it brings.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun range seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ranges'.
Suggestion: many ranges
...r the unemployed, or a chance to access many range of entertainments from enjoying a trip ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, then, while, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91964285714 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75567435346 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3744278132 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3125 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113281633918 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0436695894016 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066668401037 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.071710318536 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411846261784 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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