Most of the schools are planning to replace sports and exercise classes with more academic sessions. What i s your opinion on this change? How is this change will affect children’s life in your view?
Extracurricular activities like games and physical exercise are viewed as less important; therefore many schools are thinking to substitute these classes with the academic session. In my opinion, reduction in the number of these activities will impact negatively on physical and mental health of the children.
Our children are overwhelmed with the number of academic credit that they complete in each semester. Likely the teachers, parents are also concerned about their children’s academic success and put extra pressure at home to complete their assignment. High-grade marks in academic transcripts are primary screening tool in order to get admission in any discipline at university. Therefore children work hard at school and at home as well. Children are often physically and mentally drained to cope with this situation. Physical education is the class where they can relax and spend quality time with friends.
There are ample of benefit of exercise and sports activity. It keeps them healthy and fit. They learn how to develop team work which will help them in professional life later on. Good physic is also linked to improve mental health. A child who is active can think positively and wed out odd ideas which also influence on academic performance. Replacing of physical education class and sports event in this perspective would be detrimental as it has short term and long term effect. Children will more incline to less active form of amusement like video games and social media which will promote childhood obesity. In addition, the contents of many video games are based on violence and coarse language which have deleterious effect on personality trait of the children. Furthermore, they will be less social.
In conclusion, despite the fact that academic institution will provide more time for their academic session, this should not be at the cost of elimination of games and exercise lesson.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30718954248 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76242585878 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8635927049 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2222222222 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239869538549 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697849960345 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454803442688 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147579573745 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00221457041296 0.056905535591 4% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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