In multicultural societies, people of different cultural backgrounds live and work together. Do you think the advantages of multicultural societies outweigh the disadvantages ?

With the rapid globalization in terms of many aspects, nowadays, people tend to live in an increasing multicultural society. While it is also becoming a controversial issue about whether the combination of people who come from various ethnic groups is of benefit for the individuals and society. From my perspective, more benefits than problems will surface with this trend.

To begin with, a multicultural society or community enables their dwellers to enjoy the amazing and unique cultures that different with their own. It is undeniable that many cultures and customs are disappearing in a stunned speed due to the limitation of geography. Foreign people hardly had the opportunity to access those abundant civilizations in the pastime. This multicultural society definitely provides a great stage for people all around the world to appreciate other cultures.

Also, living with people of various ethnic cultural background, it is more likely for us to become understandable and tolerant persons. Admittedly, such a mixture of different cultures in one community may lead to some conflicts since there are different and even converse customs in those cultures. To illustrated, countless people who come from Mid-eastern never eat pork, but other people may enjoy this food. In addition, there may be a debate about the religious activities. Therefore, under those circumstances, people must learn how to understand and show more acceptance to those differences.

To concluded, it is true that controversies and conflicts will continue to exist in those multicultural society. I believe that, however, it is also beneficial for individuals and society as a whole. Since it seems inevitable for our world becoming smaller, we should pay more attention on the bright side of this trend.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42142857143 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09571791153 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.9844401211 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.2 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196922532924 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639149789716 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523939771203 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118419061856 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502349974654 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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