Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of the other parts in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The question of whether museums and art galleries out to pay attention to local or international artworks triggers several conflicting discussions. Personally, I am totally convinced that local exhibitions should devote entirely to their countries’ traditional and historical quintessences.
Firstly, this action could spark a stronger sense of cultural identity. On the societal level, ancient artworks could raise social awareness of ancestry, history and the way in which the previous generations had sacrificed for our peaceful lives. From foreigners’ perspective, they would prefer to experience and expose themselves to cultural values of the host country rather than other foreign nations. Take one of the most prestigious tourist attractions all over the world, the Great Wall of China as an example, it not only illustrates Chinese deep-rooted culture but it also brings enormous benefits for China by selling tickets for both domestic and international visitors. Moreover, this landmark attracts significant attention worldwide, makes China become a desirable destination only by means of its unique and indigenous characteristics.
Secondly, local exhibitors should not prioritize international traditions while they have not communicated all local values to the public yet. In other words, a country itself comprises a wide range of both tangible and intangible cultural heritage needed to be conserved and popularized more. If we do not preserve our cultural traits, then they will eventually disappear. For instance, “Cheo” musical technique of Viet Nam, which is recognized and acclaimed by UNESCO, has almost fallen into oblivion amongst the VietNamese young generation and gradually superseded by digital music, especially those from Korea and the US.
To conclude, I am of the opinion that cultural uniqueness plays an integral part in one country and it should be appreciated as well as protected entirely by local museums and exhibitions before promoting foreign countries’ culture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
The question of whether museums and art galleries out to pay at...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for instance, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8355704698 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25664700897 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.667785234899 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6508106569 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.916666667 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1666666667 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163524893927 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560275416569 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416412142115 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100713852292 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230185497263 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.89 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.66 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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