Most museums and art galleries collected various artworks and cultural heritages. People often argue that museums and art galleries should only exhibit the local values of relics, others think that it is beneficial to represent the diverse products from overseas. I believe that both locals and foreign reics could be shown in those exhibitions.
On the one hand, museums and art galleries are the essential place to preserve the local cultural heritage. Tourists can understand the cultural backgrounds and histories by visiting those places. Moreover, those places could become an educational place for young students so they could know deeper about the place where they grow.
In addition to, from a commercial perspective, those exhibitions should provide diverse relics to attract more visitors. People might easily get bored when the exhibitions remain to represent the same works. If those exhibit places can provide more collection from other countries that could make people interesting to visit. Moreover, people can enjoy those artwork in their local museum without traveling aboard.
In my opinion, I both agree that museums and art galleries should provide as much foreign exhibits for financial purposes as well as preserve the local relics to remain special background and cultural history. Therefore, tourists and local residents should only visit one place which represents the diverse exhibits they can enjoy.
In conclusion, while people argue on what sort of collective that museums and art galleries should exhibit, I believe that is not necessary to restrict on certain artworks or relics and those exhibitions should provide as much as collection for their visitors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, sort of, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50381679389 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58622078794 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526717557252 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3923736327 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.923076923 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162578287149 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718069273365 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575037913703 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109298922057 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337963860321 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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