some people think women should be allowed to join the army the navy and the air force just like men To what extent do you agree or disagree

Since the past century, the most famous warriors or fighters in our knowledge that must to be men. Male in history are an important warrior to a nation that present a country’s military ability. Nowadays, some people think that women have equal right to serve their country, such as join the military. And I believe this is a good result that women should allowed to be a soldier.

There are some reasons that women are qualified to join the army, firstly women are more carefully in though crisis, which is good to operate the mission more smoothly.
Secondly, women also can do the medical care job in the military for take care those armies who suffer for the missions or operations. Finally, from most research that women are well present in endure the pressures and pain than men. For example, when a pregnant women who can afford about a level 10 of pain when given a birth.

On the other hand, men therefore are perfect in their physical strength, but I believe that women also can be train as stronger as a men. And there is a well knows history in China, Moulin, a woman who went to military for her father. She have been train as a soldier since her young, and she have provided that she can fight like a male and do whatever that men can do. Nowadays, many countries are allowed women to join the military, as a result are good to improve their force ability to the nation.

In conclusion, due to women’s population have increasing than men, therefore I believe that women can be fulfill the shortage of military and women also can present their talent just like men in military.

Votes
Average: 5.8 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...riors or fighters in our knowledge that must to be men. Male in history are an importan...
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Line 4, column 263, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'woman'?
Suggestion: woman
... than men. For example, when a pregnant women who can afford about a level 10 of pain...
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Line 6, column 132, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a man' or simply 'men'?
Suggestion: a man; men
... women also can be train as stronger as a men. And there is a well knows history in C...
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Line 6, column 134, Rule ID: MAN_MEN[1]
Message: 'man' is the singular form of 'men'. Consider using 'man'?
Suggestion: man
...omen also can be train as stronger as a men. And there is a well knows history in C...
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Line 6, column 240, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...ho went to military for her father. She have been train as a soldier since her young...
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Line 6, column 294, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...n as a soldier since her young, and she have provided that she can fight like a male...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59233449477 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3338186134 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501742160279 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2109709383 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.384615385 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258675805705 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926597226483 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594995638937 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148105941452 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446926489726 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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