Museums and art galleries should concentrate on works that show history and culture of their own country rather than works of the other parts in the world To what extent do you agree or disagree

A museum is a place where all the unique and fossils are stored. Thus, making the future generations know how ancestors led their life. Nowadays, it is frequently thought that these sites should only store pieces of their own nation on the contrary not others. In this essay, I will give my contradictions for this. On one hand, art gallery shows how the previous people spent their life, and also how much we changed from them. It is not about one's own country but the past. Since only our neighborhood can't define in what manner we developed we need other communities also. For instance, in my state, our grandparents used alone red or blue colors for decoration. Whereas when I went to Chennai in the painting exhibition, I found out they used yellow and various kinds in it which are not known to us in the aged days. Therefore, I came to know that every part has its own variety of things. On other hand, each land has there own species which got vanished from the planet. The fossils of dinosaurs are not found in my birthplace. However, they can be found in other parts of the world. Once I went to Mumbai, where an international museum is present, as a part of my school tour. Without this visit, I can never see the bone structure of dinosaur gave footsteps in Africa. Since I went to that place only I can know how the parts of the creature were. To conclude, as there are minor drawbacks in having all kinds of things from different parts of the earth, which are not so breathtaking. The advantages are huge so I accept to the concept of having arts from all over the planet.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for instance, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1296.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45360824742 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45797929981 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573883161512 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1037416457 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.0 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1666666667 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153201015448 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045267143869 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03770737501 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153201015448 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 13.0946893788 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 12.4159519038 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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