Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
it is true that most of the celebrities are known for their luxurious lifestyles than for their performance or talents these days. many people think that this kind of attitude is not a good example for the young generation. To a certain extent, I would agree that this kind of behaviour would be a bad example for the society, but there are other famous people are popular due to their outstanding accomplishment.
On the one hand, it is a fact that many famous people become popular due to their fancy lifestyle, instead of their outstanding achievement these days. Their acting talent might be standard or below the average, but they are making sensation to the public by showing their wealth and glamorous lifestyles. one of the examples would be Kim Kardashian who is famous for her reality television program, whereas it mostly shows her luxurious mansion, party and shopaholic lifestyles and less of her acting. it is believed that the behaviour would be a negative influence for the young people as it teaches them about hedonistic lifestyle.
On the other hand, there are celebrities who are popular for their incredible acts or outstanding performance. these people have shown to the world that they have reached success due to strong determination and hard work, and the public always recognise them for their masterpiece of arts and great achievements. one of the examples would be the legendary English footballer david beckham. he was not only a good athlete but also became the model of some sports apparels. Although david beckham sometimes had shown his glamorous lifestyle, but he had also shown to the public that he was a good football player. he had informed in his biography that to achieved success, he had to work hard in his young age, as he had to practice in doing penalty kick for around 1000 kick per day consistently. these kinds of celebrities are worth to be followed by the young generation.
In conclusion, many famous people are well known for their wealth and luxurious style, instead of their achievement and it would be a negative example for the young age people. To a certain point, I would disagree with the opinion, since there are other celebrities who are famous due to their great talent and performance. In my opinion, I think the public should be more selective in choosing their role models, not just in front of the camera, but we should also see from their personal life as well.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 416.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.875 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68731938295 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444711538462 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4867302752 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.294117647 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4705882353 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33020020531 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115966085041 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832388080687 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232472460916 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100394375943 0.056905535591 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.