Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this era of advanced technology, gaining celebrity has become a controversial issue. It is believed that most celebrities are known for their luxurious lifestyle than for their accomplishments. Hence, they tend to be not a good example to be followed by the young generation. In my opinion, I agree with this aforementioned statement, but other famous individuals have obtained prosperity due to their hard work.
It is true that nowadays there are some people who are famous due to their glamour and welfare. It is significantly caused by the emerge of social media applications. This results in who has a quite number of followers to be considered as a celebrity even though they have no success to mention. For example, these famous individuals advertise for a major company such as a smoking company. Therefore, these people and their behavior set a bad example for young adolescents who try to imitate them.
In contrast, not all celebrities have earned their reputation for doing nothing. Many great people have done a lot of hard work to achieve their fame. For instance, the great football athlete Leo Messi spent thousands of hours training to be one of the best footballers in the world. In addition, these human beings could encourage young children to follow them, which could also motivate them to enroll in courses, namely sports, dancing, and to name a few. Consequently, the number of famous people in the world is rising, and it depends on the young generation themselves to choose who to follow.
In conclusion, this essay argues why some people are being famous without any achievement, while others dedicated their time and hard work to acquisition fame. In my opinion, I agree that some of them are known for their wealth and high standard of living. Nevertheless, it is all the choice of the young individuals to select their role model.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('quite') instead an adjective, or a noun ('number') instead of another adjective.
...a applications. This results in who has a quite number of followers to be considered as a cele...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98083067093 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85706615547 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55910543131 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.300570415 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7058823529 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2352941176 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415652194108 0.244688304435 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130512031141 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898024429402 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261205862067 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517057894933 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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