Some people believe that superstars are more famous for their stylish lifestyle and fortune than for their accomplishment. In my opinions, i totally agree that this tendency may sets a negative effect for young people.
In the first place, famous people somehow have influence on the community, especially their follower. At puberty age, the personality and behaviour of teenagers could be affected by many factors, including their idols whom they consider as role models. Therefore, when celebrities boast about their glamorous lifestyle which is continuously shown by the media that misleading many young fans around the world. Thus, youngsters start to think that such behaviour is a direct way to success and popularity among peers. They start trying to imitate the life of luxury such as shopping for brand, expensive restaurant and so on, although it is beyond their ability to pay.
Furthermore, in this day of technology, there are many paths to fame. However rather than being known for their exceptional talent, they tend to seek fame in every manner possible, including scandal such as medley and swindle. For example, some youngsters create a phony account and try to deceive others about their affluence in order to gain popularity on social media. Not only it dangerous but also it sets the wrong mindset that hardworking and high achievement in any sphere are not necessary.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that seeking wealth and glamour rather than high results is detrimental to adolescents. Once young people get used to this lifestyle, it's difficult to return the normal life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22868217054 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70975697907 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647286821705 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7138804861 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.769230769 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8461538462 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344085769997 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107162870702 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775362874878 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212323263591 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103703745695 0.056905535591 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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