Some people believe that superstars are more famous for their stylish lifestyle and fortune than for their accomplishments. In my opinion, I agree that this tendency may sets a negative effect on young people.
In the first place, famous people somehow influence the community, especially their followers. At puberty age, the personality and behavior of teenagers could be affected by many factors, including their idols whom they consider role models. As a result, when celebrities boast about their glamorous lifestyle, which is constantly displayed on social media, they mislead many young fans all over the world. Thus, young people begin to believe such behavior is a direct path to success and popularity among peers. They start trying to imitate the life of luxury such as shopping for the brand, expensive restaurants, and so on, although it is beyond their ability to pay.
Furthermore, in this day of technology, there are many paths to fame. However, rather than being acknowledged for their incredible talent, they tend to seek popularity in any way imaginable, including scandals like medley and swindling. For example, some youngsters create a phony account and try to deceive others about their affluence in order to gain popularity on social media. It is not only harmful, but it also creates the false impression that hard work and excellent accomplishments in any field are not required.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that seeking wealth and glamour rather than high results is detrimental to adolescents. It is difficult for young people to return to a normal life once they have become accustomed to this lifestyle.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24242424242 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82290253038 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8530919771 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.461538462 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388766853321 0.244688304435 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122182131272 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970283567408 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245822272057 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101831724303 0.056905535591 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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