Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people
Moving towards the 21st century, a large number of people are nowadays expressing a deeply growing concern about celebrities. In fact, there are some who hold firmly to their belief that some celebrities are known for their glamorous lifestyles rather than for the work they do and they set a bad example for children. However, others argue convincingly that many celebrities whose accomplishments make them excellent role models for young people. As far as I am concerned, I wholeheartedly agree with the former argument, and some major points will be addressed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, there is a clear evidence for other people to support the opposite view there are celebrities who are popular for their incredible acts or outstanding performance. Actually, it is a well-documented fact that actors, musicians and sports stars become famous dols because they worked hard and applied themselves to develop real skills and abltes. For instance, the actor and martial artist Jacke Chan, who has become world-famous through years of practice and hard work.
On the other hand, there are a number of points for people to defend the view that celebrities are now rated on the bass of their glamour quotient and bank balance. First of all, it is commonly accepted that they may consider being rich at all costs will make them to be celebrities. The most obvious example to prove is that young girls tend to take care of their appearance, have rich boyfriends, prostitute rather than studying or learning at school which may lead to the deterioration of morale. Equally important, there is no doubt that many people do achieve fame without really working for it. This is supported by the fact that they may have inherited money from parents, marred a famous or wealthy person. Finally, it is inevitable that people may use beauty or commit crimes to have a luxurious life. For example, the models or beautiful girls may have sensitive and close relationships with millionaires to have financial support from them.
All things considered, it is my strong belief that when their celebrities behave badly because of insufficient education and lack of acknowledgment, this may results in social evils in the society of youngsters. Accordingly, I highly recommend that the governments should enhance people’s awareness in terms of a great number of ways to become rich and famous. If this recommendation is carried out, the comprehensive development our future generations will be ensured
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
Moving towards the 21st century, a large number of people are nowadays expressing a deeply...
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Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...y lead to the deterioration of morale. Equally important, there is no doubt that many ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, well, for example, for instance, in fact, no doubt, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15931372549 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90984847325 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575980392157 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8398760936 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.823529412 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.82352941176 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377381678918 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101930415783 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922493859198 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214160099108 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649879103372 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 34, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
Moving towards the 21st century, a large number of people are nowadays expressing a deeply...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 503, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...y lead to the deterioration of morale. Equally important, there is no doubt that many ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, well, for example, for instance, in fact, no doubt, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 408.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15931372549 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90984847325 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575980392157 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8398760936 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.823529412 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.82352941176 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377381678918 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101930415783 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922493859198 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214160099108 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649879103372 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.