In recent years, many ocean animals have been shifted from their natural sea environment to wildlife parks for the sake of an entertainment for the people. From my perspective, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh its disadvantages.
On the one hand, there are some drawbacks of moving creatures to ocean parks for the purpose of people's enjoyment. Firstly, the babies have to live far away their family. For example, many small dolphins are removed their mother at an early age and they have to be trained or learned for people's entertainment. Secondly, living in artificial habitat has some bad impacts on animals' growth. To be more precise, they are not indulged in marine's life as they loved. They are treated as prisoners while they need a bigger space where they free enjoy their wildlife, which leads to decrease their lifespan.
On the other hand, relocating of ocean creatures in amusement parks brings various benefits. The first reason is that it is appealing a lot of tourism who want to see different animals like turtles or sharks. Therefore, it plays an crucial role in the development of a country as well as national economy. Furthermore, captive creatures allow scientists to do advanced studies about the growth or nutrition of them. These researches help them broaden knowledge about ocean life and ways to aid or secure endangered animals.
Overall, removing ocean animals from their environment to ocean parks for entertainment has not only great advantages but also some disadvantages. It seems to me that the negatives outweigh the positives because every creature need to live together with their family and thrive in their habitat.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 375, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...ificial habitat has some bad impacts on animals growth. To be more precise, they are no...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... turtles or sharks. Therefore, it plays an crucial role in the development of a co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14705882353 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78197827349 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613970588235 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.769484749 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318456826496 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953817389469 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071112340035 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18482206686 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366206651099 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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