Nowadays, more and more people are using social networking sites and apps such as Facebook, Twitter… What are the reasons of this trend? What are the impacts that social networks bring to people who use it?
These days, the usage of social networking websites and apps such as Facebook, Twitter, and many others has developed significantly among citizens all over the world. In my opinion, this trend can be attributed to some reasons, and this revolution can produce many negative impacts on users.
Firstly, I argue that there are two main causes of why social media has gained considerable popularity on the global scale. Obviously, due to the globalization in the era of technology, it is essential for people., especially working adults who have entered the competitive job market, to keep themselves well-informed and updated about temporary social issues and knowledge. Meanwhile, social networks contain a wealth of information at people’s fingertips related to several fields such as education, environment, science because most of the social network users enjoy sharing and spreading knowledge about their favourite topics. In addition virtual world on these websites is the power tool for communication, allowing people to keep in touch with their loved ones and colleagues by texting or making video calls. For example, it is not necessary for office workers to gather in a certain place for meetings due to the fact that by using online-based communication tools such as Viber, they are able to contact with each other to conduct the meetings regardless of geographical distance.
However, I claim that there could be many drawbacks which the advent of those apps and websites has brought with it. Firstly, when citizens spend too much time accessing to social networks, there would be an increase in sedentary lifestyle, leading to many help problems for users. In particular, exposing themselves to the screens of smartphones or computers in the long-term periods could result in bodily discomforts such as eyestrains, headaches or even some diseases like obesity of stroke. Another downside of digital communication tools is the decline in real relationships. In fact, if people focus too much on Facebook, Instagram or Twitter, they will lose time for family bonding time or face-to-face conservation with their friends, causing them to be isolated from the outside society.
In conclusion, I believe that the rapid emergence of social networking sites and apps stems from the demand for acquiring information and connection of individuals, however; the participants of those websites need to be aware of the harmful effects mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 641, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...wledge about their favourite topics. In addition virtual world on these websites is the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, well, while, even so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3974025974 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97080413019 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61038961039 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.390784344 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.846153846 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6153846154 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3076923077 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220162781212 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068194129478 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572103223755 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131351743814 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464832325593 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.53 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 78.4519038076 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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