Nowadays schoolchildren and students are taught to be competitive towards their classmates and aren’t encouraged to help the weaker students. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?
It is true that there is increasing competition among children at school and weaker children seem to receive little support from their counterparts. Although this trend has some benefits, I would accept that its negative impacts are more considerable.
On the one hand, there are some advantages of stimulating the competition between children at school. The first benefit is that children would put all effort and time into the study with a purpose of catching up with their peers. For example, instead of spending time watching games or going out, they will sit at the table and try to complete all tasks that their teachers give. As a result, parents and teachers could witness a rapid progress of these learners, which completely satisfy their expectation. Besides enhancing the efforts in study, competition also aims to practice children’s self-confidence. They are less likely rely on the support of surrounding people and would find the way to overcome the challengings they have.
However, I believe that the drawbacks of this tendency are more significant. Firstly, encouraging people to compete with others from the early stages can cause tremendous effects to children. Children are prone to be easily envious when their counterparts obtain better results and lack of co-operation with others. Additionally, the competition in the academic environment also results in the strong emphasis on study, which interferes children with extra-curriculum activities. As a consequence, children are ill-equipped knowledge about society and building relationships, which plays an integral part in their career path later.
In conclusion, this trend can help young students in various aspects, however, I still believe that its negatives outweigh the positive effect
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'rapid progress'.
Suggestion: rapid progress
...ult, parents and teachers could witness a rapid progress of these learners, which completely sat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, for example, in conclusion, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50915750916 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04552707152 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626373626374 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.245912522 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.428571429 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142894900646 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476214586889 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310038833761 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916180950708 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189621866987 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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