Nowadays, some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using the computer. Do you agree or disagree?
In the age of information technology, many people believe that Internet can replace the needed of museums and art exhibitions since all historical objects and works are available on websites. I strongly disagree with this point of view for some reasons.
On the one hand, there are two main reasons that convince people to choose the Internet as the source of historical objects and works information. Firstly, The Internet provides audiences with an enormous amount of free historical information which is easily accessible in the most convenient way. Actually, by a finger click, people can get various kinds of information about an artwork from the author to materials. Secondly, online museums and exhibitions offer customers remarkable services that cannot be found at the real ones. For example, there is no time limit or restricted information data on the Internet, people can access from local to global historical sources of information at any time of the day.
On the other hand, real museums and exhibitions are crucial and play as an indispensable part of the society. The first reason is that since museums and galleries are managed by a group of experts who have deep knowledge about the historical objects, the provided information is verified and more reliable. Additionally, it is undoubted that firsthand experience is more interested than imagined experience. In other words, while online-based museums can never express adequate values of historic objects by just seeing pictures and reading contents, real museums with professional guidance and modern supported facilities allows people to have detailed knowledge or even touching to the real piece of works . Furthermore, museums and art exhibitions place an important role in attracting foreigner visitors who are keen on understanding country’s customs and traditional values and consequently contribute not only to globalize local cultural knowledge but also to increase government revenue.
To sum up, even though the online-based information is a great way to learn about historical works and objects, museums and exhibitions are still important for real experience and irreplaceable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...even touching to the real piece of works . Furthermore, museums and art exhibition...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04356721684 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559880239521 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.9090062959 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.307692308 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3846153846 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239555325826 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846773977922 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659687955071 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156251677192 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671205515575 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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