Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing ( for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening).Do you think the adv

The new era of technology has been started after the revolution industry era. This generation attends human to depend on the digitalization products such as smartphone and CCTV camera. And this condition emerges an argument that the improvement of technology whether it is more beneficial or not in the relation of public privacy.

To begin with, the public shall know where the discovery of technology gives preferences for people to work more efficient and saving energy. The statement is supported by the information today such as, firstly, the connection in long distance relationships can be cut by using of handphone directly in everytime and everywhere. Another example, there are many media which are provided by third party developer to produce software like Instagram, Facebook, and Pinterest. In these applications, people can connect each other and share their stories to friends from around the world. Not only relation but this media might decrease the underpressure mental because the masses get options to split their bad experiences to their friends. This why the improvement of technology is a must.

On the other hand, every technology shall be driven by the law. To convince about the information is brought correctly and factual, and there is no any violence about social norm or public privacy, so the regulation must be provided to protect problems. For instance, the pornography content must be stopped to sharing in public media.

In conclusion, technology gives an easy access for the human to governance their work more efficient. But, the development must be protected to neglect the dis-function of information which adjusts to the violence of human right.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ght correctly and factual, and there is no any violence about social norm or publi...
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Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
...dia. In conclusion, technology gives an easy access for the human to governance their work ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, so, third, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30855018587 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91726122722 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598513011152 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.445624569 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2142857143 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161516567384 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554077163691 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0229298773307 0.0667982634062 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091621979221 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253924913495 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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