Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the adva

Privacy problems caused by monitoring technology are quite common among society. Some people take the view that high-end technology provide us enough protected space. However, some others argue that it is technology that lead to privacy leakage. This passage will discuss both view and give my own view toward this problem.

For advantages, it is admitted that technology is surely to protect us from attacks and dangers. For instance, if condition admitted, we can use security camera for monitoring whether thefts came to our house. Meanwhile, videos from security camera could also be used as evidences for polices to investigate malfeasance.

Notwithstanding advantages of monitor technology are quite remarkable, the drawbacks of that cannot be overlooked. First, constantly, privacy of people is being exposed without any notices. Nowadays, some virus software would infiltrate into computers and cellphone and steal some files in our electric devices, which would cause leakage of personal information so that the privacy of common people is being monitoring by some illegal organizations for bad purpose.

Furthermore, it is possible that monitoring technology would lead to anxieties among the whole society. Nowadays, as news reports related to crimes about privacy leakages are constantly broadcasted, people begin to have a sense of anxiety about their privacy, and begin to suspect whether their privacy is being snooping by their friends. This would lead to isolation and distrust of relationships between people.

All in all, in my opinion, I supposed that the disadvantages of monitoring technology would outweight those advantages. This is because that this kind of technology would be misuse by some people, which would cause people do not have any privacy in society.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, while, for instance, i suppose, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54909090909 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87096839135 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563636363636 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1417730056 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.733333333 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269701604695 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941858673756 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486060555914 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154244147278 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447426861616 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 50.2224549098 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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