Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
There is a widely discussed issue regarding using technology to monitor people's daily conversations and also tracing their behaviors via security cameras. While the majority of individuals are unaware of this happenstance, therefore it appears that the disadvantages of this topic might overbalance its merit. Accordingly, a couple of reasons will be discussed in this easy.
Admittedly, one of the practical usages of CCTV cameras seems to be for police forces. By using these cameras in public places such as stadiums, shopping centers, banks, and even private houses, police can detect crimes. Therefore, they will be able to find delinquent people with these proofs and legally deal with them.
Notwithstanding that, some negative impacts of monitoring can be seen in everyone’s life. The first and foremost one is the issue of ignoring personal privacy. Examples of this are widespread in the United States of America, where people were unaware of being monitored, and when they discovered this fact, they rioted against the law. Besides, the majority of them inferred that authorities are overlooking their freedom. Hence, they declared that they would not feel convenient while they are resting or having phone calls anymore.
Furthermore, statistics present that the level of stress might arise when people are under monitoring. For instance, employees who know they are being watched or listened find it challenging to concentrate on their responsibilities since they want to do their bests. Even though managers can detect honorable workers, they might begin to think that any negligible mistake can undermine their position at a career. So, anxiety increases if people feel monitoring, and it directly weakens their outputs and productivity.
In conclusion, CCTV cameras can indeed be employed in detecting a wide range of offenses. Nonetheless, it appears to me that it might disregard privacy and lead to stress.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'concentrating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: concentrating
...watched or listened find it challenging to concentrate on their responsibilities since they wa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, nonetheless, regarding, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45182724252 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92903826017 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627906976744 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7149664383 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5294117647 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7058823529 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64705882353 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236881394845 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672264435372 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473935583632 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122506276231 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419167215522 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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