Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear
that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in.
As cities and countries become more and more developed, the number of shopping centers would increase. Also, most of them are not just a shopping center, because there are lots of other feature such as restaurant, café, and bookstore and entertainment center. As a result, most of the people, especially young people, prefer to spend their spare time in those malls. In my point of view, this trend will bring some new concerns since can influence society negatively.
First of all, it should be stuck in mind that shopping is a one of the most important things in the life and sometimes people could be addicted to going shopping often. Plenty of research has been done on this matter and it has been proved that there is a direct relation between individuals’ mood and shopping. Sometimes it is known as a therapy which is very popular among female. Despite the fact that shopping causes pleasure to some extent, but it could become a habit if people go regularly and lead to consumerism manner among youth generation. In fact, people use to purchase without necessities. Electrical gadget and clothes are two outstanding instance, which teenager are keen on. Sometimes they putting their stuff after a short time and buy a new one. They never learn how to spend their money effectively for their needs.
On the other hand, when people use to spend their free time at shopping centers, the level of other beneficial activities such as taking exercise, reading book, researching and communication with family and friends would reduce significantly. This situation brings some considerable drawbacks which impact the total society. The number of health problems such as obesity or heart diseases would boots because of less physical activities. Besides, in most of the shopping center there are lots of restaurant and cafes that offer verity of fast-food and unhealthy snack which could change eating habits. Also, when young people spend less time with their families, they become prone to anti-sociable behavior.
Taking everything into consideration, it seems that spending much time at malls has huge number of drawback which can effect society. I think there should be some attractive alternative to encourage young people to do at their free time. Also, some educational program to avoid extending materialism and consumerism.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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Line 3, column 661, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'instance' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'instances'.
Suggestion: instances
... gadget and clothes are two outstanding instance, which teenager are keen on. Sometimes ...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...eeds. On the other hand, when people use to spend their free time at shopping ce...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'boot'
Suggestion: boot
...such as obesity or heart diseases would boots because of less physical activities. Be...
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Line 5, column 489, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun restaurant seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of restaurants'.
Suggestion: lots of restaurants
...n most of the shopping center there are lots of restaurant and cafes that offer verity of fast-foo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16797900262 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72416922259 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574803149606 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.30739454 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.45 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33222489851 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881319632333 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078184680357 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197986377034 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390814308509 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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