The number of people interested in cosmetic surgery is increasing in order to improve their physical appearance Why do people do operations to change the way they look Do you think it is a positive or negative development

Over the past decade , technology has shown its advancement in the cosmetic field too.Nowadays, people are looking forward towards cosmetic surgeries in order to enhance their looks .There are numerous reasons behind this trend . I,however,believe that this is a negative development and shall discuss my view in this essay .

There are myriad reasons behind rise in the number of cosmetic surgeries .Firstly,the present world has become very materialistic .People tend to look modern and younger than their age.At the same time,celebrities in order to look attractive undergo surgeries to modify their facial features.As a result,their followers tend to walk on their footsteps leasing to a rise in the number of cosmetic surgeries.Additionally,people opt for these surgeries in order to cure some facial deformity as a result of burns or acid attacks.

There are numerous pitfalls of undergoing cosmetic surgeries.Firstly,such surgeries can be harmful to our skin and may cause skin cancers.A recent survey had reported a greater number of skin cancers in those people who underwent surgeries than those who did not .Furthermore ,people lose their natural appearance and wear artificial masks of beauty and had to regularly undergo treatment for proper maintenance of skin.Moreover,people tend to spend thousands of dollars for such operations which can cause a burden on the pockets of the common masses.

To conclude,I will state that cosmetic surgeries have proven to have a negative impact on the society .It had created a feeling among people that beauty is the paramount aspect of life.Hence,those who cannot afford it might feel less confident of themselves.Thus,such surgeries much be regulated and must only be used in case of certain casualties

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48161764706 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.62248989755 2.80592935109 129% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602941176471 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 20.2975951904 266% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 174.042983197 49.4020404114 352% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 298.2 106.682146367 280% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.4 20.7667163134 262% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.2 7.06120827912 258% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 5.01903807615 657% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238330079329 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12326581897 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564161169807 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140165121349 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477604984171 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.6 13.0946893788 241% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 8.21 50.2224549098 16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 11.3001002004 226% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.9 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.1190380762 233% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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