One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
The development of medical care enables people to live longer. I believe this is more advantageous than disadvantageous.
Admittedly, longer life expectancy leads to more spending for the elderly. Governments must expend larger funds for pension and insurance for them for each additional year they live after retiring. In addition, their family need to spend more time visiting them and face additional financial burdens to take care of them in the case they are hospitalised.
However, along with the increase in people’s average age, older people work for a longer time. In the past, my country allowed people to retire at the age of 60, but the retirement age has been extended to 68. In Japan, the elderly commonly works a full time or part time job such as taxi drivers and business owners, not relying on their pension to make a living. As a result, the growing number of senior citizens in effect contributes more tax to countries’ budgets.
In addition, extended longevity is not only the fortune for the elderly but also their families. Old people can have more time to follow their passions or just simply do their pastimes to savour the rest of their life without the concern of making a living. Moreover, to many people, senior family members are the source of wisdom for their daily issues. For example, grandparents can give useful pieces of advice on how to rear children properly without spoiling them.
In short, human’s longer lifespan has more positive effects than negatives ones. Although our society needs to spend more resources to take care of old people, they contribute more to our society in terms of finance. Besides, living longer improves the elderly’s well-being and enables them to support their families as senior advisors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: fulltime
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in addition, in short, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0409556314 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62434480202 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587030716724 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9755447894 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3125 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3125 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177218416805 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701366736158 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745576453509 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121237699563 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078573178589 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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