The only reason for people working hard is to earn money To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

The only reason for people working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes argued that the size of the salary offered is the key consideration for people to work hard. Personally, I disagree with the idea because I believe that other factors also motivate us to work and compel us to work harder.

On the one hand, I agree that the financial prospects play a vital role in taking a job or starting a business for most people, considering the fact that we all need enough money to meet our daily basic needs. For example, to have a good quality of life, a handsome pay is necessary to pay for housing, bills, food and healthcare. In this case, most people tend to have a strong motivation to work hard, especially for those who are impoverished or disadvantaged in some way. Otherwise, they may find it challenging to support themselves and raise a family.

Nevertheless, I believe that there must be other considerations incentivizing people to work hard. Firstly, many professionals aspire to great feelings of job satisfaction, which can be achieved through hard work, the skills they learn and their professional accomplishments, rather than the salary they get. Secondly, some people spare no effort work because they want to help others and make their own contribution to society. For example, volunteers work hard to promote activities that contribute to solve some social problems without too much rewards. Finally, people might perform their jobs on the grounds that they can obtain enormous pleasure, and they are deeply infatuated with their job.

In conclusion, while salaries certainly help to drive people to work hard, it is unfair to state that money outweighs all other motivators.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'supporting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: supporting
...Otherwise, they may find it challenging to support themselves and raise a family. Never...
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Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... solve some social problems without too much rewards. Finally, people might perform ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03663003663 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89371261587 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608058608059 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3102607275 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.583333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24901008473 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096571677884 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547835671628 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160436287329 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220478214196 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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