Parents often give children everything they ask for and do what they like. Is it good for children? What are the consequences when they grow up?

It is a very common trend that parents always want to grant all of their children's wishes. In this essay, I will discuss the effects of such habit to the development of children, especially when they reach their adulthood.

Firstly, granting all of children's wants may cause them to become spoiled, selfish, and individual. Kids will feel that their needs are always need to be fulfilled, no matter what the circumstances are. When they reach their adulthood, they will not only interact with their parents, but also with other different kind of people. And in certain circumstances, such as in the working life where they become someone's employees and are required to prioritize team's needs, they will find difficulties because they never behave like that. They will feel that their needs are those that should be fulfilled first, thus making them fail in cooperating with other colleagues in the workplace. Those kind of children will only become selfish and avoided people in the work environment. As a consequence, they will fail in their careers because of their inability to do teamwork.

Secondly, children that are provided with all of their wants will unable to life independently. It is because they are used to rely on their parents, and never struggle to achieve their wants by themselves. Such habit will make children become lazy and thus will impact their performances in their future life. For the example, a children is always granted with all of his wishes despite his bad grades in school, while other children will be granted with something they like when they have achieved good grades. As a consequence, that kid will become indolent and unwilling to strive for anything in life, thus making him to always rely on their parents.

In conclusion, fulfilling all of kids' desires is not good behavior, since it will only bring bad consequences to their life in the future.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
...s will feel that their needs are always need to be fulfilled, no matter what the cir...
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Line 3, column 686, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'Those kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; Those kinds
...with other colleagues in the workplace. Those kind of children will only become selfish an...
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Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to relying'.
Suggestion: used to relying
...e independently. It is because they are used to rely on their parents, and never struggle to...
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Line 5, column 329, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
... in their future life. For the example, a children is always granted with all of his wishe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01261829653 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6135908457 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495268138801 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8364184718 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.933333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247831906321 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096864066834 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064854133512 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155896657503 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645954415595 0.056905535591 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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