In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
It seems that the human race is generating more properties than ever before. Consumerism and materialism are dominating trends all around the world so boldly that shopping is not simply a daily task but a popular hobby. I am strongly concerned about this tendency as it does not only destroy people’s lives but also creates disastrous damage to the environment.
First and foremost, while a hobby can bring pleasure, shopping creates a more stressful life. Indeed, there is a large number of people believing that when they get depressed, going to the mall is an effective way to hold up their mood. Nevertheless, the fact is that spending money without planning is one of the biggest mistakes that a money-conscious person should not have. It is because unplanned expenses will rapidly put them in the tight-budget condition, which increases their depression other than lower.
Secondly and more importantly, consumerism has a destructive impact on our environment. The more goods and services human beings produce, the more natural resources are used up. In fact, in order to manufacture million pairs of jeans, a great amount of water and fuel fossil is utilized; let alone the production process can create greenhouse gas emission. Besides, people buy more and they throw away more, which brings a colossal burden to the environment as the vast majority of industrial products take years or even centuries to decompose.
In conclusion, it is dangerous to consider shopping as a hobby because of its long-term effects on human’s health and the nature. It is time people came back treating it as older generations did in the past, taking it as a simple routine.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...a more stressful life. Indeed, there is a large number of people believing that when they get dep...
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Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...ed up. In fact, in order to manufacture million pairs of jeans, a great amount of water...
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Line 7, column 245, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he past, taking it as a simple routine.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12727272727 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91790482968 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665454545455 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3619206803 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.461538462 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0887539689166 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289366972693 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374864009954 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.058039112949 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413580567652 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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