In the past sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win a match or to break world records These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous What message does this send to young peopl | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win a match or to break world records. These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous.

What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves?

Sports is gaining more and more popularity day by day. In past decades the primary motivation of athletes was either to win matches or set up new world records. This scenario changed massively as prize money and being famous have become principal goals of many players. In addition these sends a loud and clear message to the next generation that sports is the best way to achieve fame and money. This type of attitudes evident numerous negative effect in the sports world such as crashing young prospects career as well as creating faulty role model among upcoming athletes.

Sports is an effective way to make a country proud. It used to be. However, these mindsets changed among many as various appealing tournaments or native leagues have been established providing lucrative paycheck just for participation. As a result, many athletes tend to play for huge salaries and popularity. These broadcasts a lesson to the youth that sports is the most attractive livelihood to gain enormous wealth and popularity. Moreover, kids follow this path as these are desired by all of us. To cite an example, cricketers now prefer to play big domestic leagues such as IPL as the pay massively. sometimes cricketer favor participating IPL over national team.

On the other hand, when young prospects debuted in the field, they instantly get fame and sponsors for just a few good performances. Due to this, many prospects failed to reach their full potential as they can't control themselves in the limelight. Futhermore, they lose their ambition and end their career as failures. Futhermore, next generation of players follow the stars of today. Sometimes well know players become so blind in their fame, they do terrible stuffs such as drunk driving, drug addiction, etc. These may provoke youth into the wrong path. For instance, Ronaldinho was the best football player of the last decade, soon after achieving success he was mentioned in various drug rackets and law-breaking offenses. At the end, he retirement ended his promising career.

In a nutshell, sportsmen are the most loved personalities around the world. When they focus on money or being famous, it encourages other to be an athlete to gain those benefits. This kind of mind sets may lead to adverse ramification such as finishing many promising careers of young sportsmen as well as generating a defective idols.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ome principal goals of many players. In addition these sends a loud and clear message to...
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Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sometimes
...agues such as IPL as the pay massively. sometimes cricketer favor participating IPL over ...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...d to reach their full potential as they cant control themselves in the limelight. Fu...
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Line 7, column 330, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'idol'?
Suggestion: idol
...tsmen as well as generating a defective idols.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07928388747 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70741934408 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601023017903 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.357985776 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.75 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2916666667 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262369914248 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699385177991 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833923027231 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162353502872 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10295961167 0.056905535591 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments