People are consuming more and more sugar based drinks Why What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption

Essay topics:

People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption?

In contemporary society, certain reasons and feasible approaches to the phenomenon that sugar-based drinks have become increasingly popular has been a controversial issue in many parts of the world. This essay shall outline the causes and possible measures to address this situation.
On the one hand, nowadays, more and more materials are discovered as well as automated machines are developed. This can lead to the prosperity and promotion of sweet drinks industry because a large number of sugar-based products can be generated with unlimited resources as high as possible. In addition, these days, there is a variety of companies related to sugar drinks which are in a competitive atmosphere. For example, if their rivals’ products are consumed with a larger amount than their brands, they will make a strategy to bring their own new sugar-based drinks into the business market. As a result, sweet drinks are everywhere, even appearance more often than water.
Regarding certain feasible solutions, firstly, to reduce the daily intake of sugar, the government should establish some health awareness campaigns to raise people’s level of knowledge about how much sugar should be eaten on daily life to ensure the health background. Apart from that, since sweet drinks companies aim mainly at a target audience of children and adolescents. Hence, children should be under the surveillance of their parents by limiting the times they can come to the vending machine to buy sugar-based drinks.
In conclusion, because of the large number of sweet drinks brands, materials, and machines, sugar drinks has been more and more popular. Therefore, some aforementioned measures, such as campaigns and the attention of adults, are offered to reduce the amount of intake sugar.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 190, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...motion of sweet drinks industry because a large number of sugar-based products can be generated w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, apart from, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1499.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37275985663 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84798094987 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587813620072 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3967238162 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.916666667 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372935692567 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125054308775 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723661739397 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210499840357 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892892495914 0.056905535591 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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