People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today’s world, there is a public debate about the workforce. It is acknowledged that people live longer in this day and age. Therefore, they should work longer than in the past. From my perspective, I remain unconvinced with this view.
To begin with, the most frequent factor contributing to my view is that elder people stay in the labour force longer would reduce the chance for the young generation. One example to demonstrate this point is that according to the research on youth employment in Australia, published in 2016, prior to the crisis, youth unemployment was 8.8%, which was close to the low rate of the 1970s. In order to foster the economy, the government in this country enacted the laws about increasing the working years of older, the proportion of unemployed young people in this country increased to 13.9%. That made this country go into recession. As a result, the fact that older people stay in the labour force longer can put this country at risk of economic downturn.
In addition, one explanation to support my view is that people cannot meet the demand of jobs when getting older because of their weak physical health. In reality, studies in this field showed that people from 50-55 years old are more susceptible to stress, which can result in the weakening of their health to contribute to their work as well as the decrease in the productivity. As this example reveals, it is apparent that people cannot ensure the work quality when getting older. Consequently, they need to retire after many years of working.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that people stay in the workforce longer can arise many demerits for our society. As a consequence of this, I totally disagree with the statement that the working hours should be longer since people have higher life expectancy in comparison with in the past.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, may, so, therefore, well, in addition, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89873417722 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63071963302 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537974683544 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9735041285 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.2 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248626599099 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921239533643 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839802353614 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173179920623 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728188223965 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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