People should look after their health as a duty to the society where they live, rather than their own benefits. What extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people say that residents should take care of their health as an obligation to the state instead of doing so to benefit themselves individually.
It is understandable as to why individuals can reap certain benefits if taking care of their own health. Firstly, they would enjoy an excellent physical and mental health, crucial to accomplishing a sense of contentment in life. A normal person who frequently jogs on the treadmill, lifts the weights or keeps doing the push-ups at the gym, for example, can build up strong muscles, giving him a well-proportioned body. Secondly, as individuals are those who have a perfect insight into their own health condition, they can adjust their daily diets appropriately, which will bring more productive outcomes. If a person is underweight, he will need a higher daily amount of fat and protein while an obese person is supposed to slash his regular intake of fast foods and consume more vegetables and fruits.
I believe that rather than the masses, it is the state’s obligation to ensure that its citizens are leading a healthy lifestyle. Such is some people’s ignorance of their consuming habits that government intervention is required and only their power is effective. Government should impose stringent checks or place an outright ban on foodstuffs of unclear origins which contain health-damaging substances (preservatives, additives) for human health. As another step, cigarettes or fast foods should be levied high taxes on to discourage citizens from this unhealthy habit. Besides, once all citizens are living healthily, a nation can hugely profit from a robust workforce, contributing to the economic well-being. Students would study more effectively without skipping classes due to poor health, or workers would make fewer mistakes, resulting in improved productivity.
In conclusion, it seems to me that both the government and individuals are direct beneficiaries, so they should join hands in this issue.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12509895785 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.645161290323 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4696454151 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 128.769230769 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218718919469 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732068987987 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569664428165 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126489579503 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427119139983 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.