Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
The World Cup football match and the Olympics are held worldwide with great national support and expectations. As a fan of those competitions, I agree with the idea that sporting events can be necessary for international relations and national unity. In this essay, I will think about the effects of these popular sporting events.
First of all, the World Cup, Olympics and other international games work for easing tensions among different nations. For example, South and North Korea have football games regularly which give two nations a chance to understand each other deeply. In the mid 1990s, a hundreds of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events. Even if it sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the match. We all realized that they were very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive. Through the sports, two divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions and could feel the patriotic unity.
On the other hand, some sports matches can make international relations worse. For instance, football or baseball games between Korea and Japan are always big matches in two countries where full of tensions overflow. Sometimes, after the matches, the two rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. Even much worse scenario is that the troubles caused by losing games affect the players directly. As far as I know, a couple of Korean players in Japan are suffered from invisible discrimination after the match between two countries.
In conclusion, I think that international sporting occasions can be one of the good ways to ease tensions or to release patriotism safely. However, I believe that games can not be the fundamental ways for the sound patriotism or peaceful international relations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 266, Rule ID: A_HUNDREDS[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. Consider using: 'a hundred'
Suggestion: a hundred
...nd each other deeply. In the mid 1990s, a hundreds of North Korean supporters came to Sout...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 266, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a hundred' or simply 'hundreds'?
Suggestion: a hundred; hundreds
...nd each other deeply. In the mid 1990s, a hundreds of North Korean supporters came to Sout...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 317, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an aggressive way" with adverb for "aggressive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...er and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. Even much worse scenario is that the t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25641025641 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72352928543 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570512820513 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.9131388127 49.4020404114 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.5 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267647390525 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901471742751 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756303966483 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176024582509 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05936337125 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.