In the modern era, with the improved living standard, the world has been through an explosion of population during the last decade. More and more babies are born every second and even surpass the number of the elderly. However, a group of people are concerned about the impact that this current circumstance could bring to our society. In the essay, I should indicate my agreement with the belief that the benefits of having a young population could overshadow its drawback.
On the one hand, I am acknowledging the reason underlying the hesitation among people when discussing the phenomenon. The key rationale is that it takes time for adolescents to adapt to a new working environment as well as the required skills. Studying is a long journey, and not everyone can complete it within 2-3 days. Therefore, newbie employees could possibly cause trouble when they are not used to it. For example, to make a Vietnamese traditional conical hat, it will take 1 days for skillful workers to finish, whereas this process could last 3-4 days for young people who have less experience. Consequently, it might result in detrimental production or even deteriorate the organizations’ reputation if the products’ quality worse.
On the other hand, it is deemed questionable at best that an aging population would bring a better reality to the world. Japanese is concrete evidence of this fact. At the moment, Japanese authorities are putting their effort in order to cope with the lack of labourforce since their workers have gone to the retired age. As can be seen, this type of community still results in a similar impact to the world.
What is more, I believe that the young generation are more energetic and enthusiastic compared with the older people. It is admitted that youngsters lack hands-on experiences, yet they are willing to learn and improve themselves day-by-day. Moreover, in companies, they are likely the ones who give a new idea, due to the fact that the young might have a different approach to the problems. Thus, after being being trained, young people could the driving force of an economy and create a great advantage for a country
In conclusion, while the olderly gain their unique techniques after a long time working which could be of great advantages, I am on the side that the young generation are the key to all development and invention in the future world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: could
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Suggestion:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: being
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 401.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98753117207 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79625747234 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56608478803 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9754227039 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.111111111 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175520586266 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449739612782 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341598796654 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912482541563 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323411077728 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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