Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic:
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
You should write at least 250 words.
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.
Music has always been present in the world. From ancient history up to these modern times, music is very much a part of people’s lives. No particular culture will be complete without it. As long as there will be societies, there will is culture and inevitably music. Music has been experienced by people for generations. This is evidenced in the numerous references to music that is documented in stories about people from the beginning of the world until this century. As long as there are humans, there will always be music. If this is so, what is the role of music in our lives and why is it that important?
As human beings, we have a need to express ourselves. As Malsow’s hierarchy of needs explain, individuals long to be fulfilled by safety and belonging. One of the ways to satisfy this need is to reach out to fellow humans through expression. Music as an expression of feelings has been recorded since long ago. Artifacts of different musical instruments have been archeologically found and songs of old have been passed through generations. This is perhaps the reason why music has always permeated the lives of people regardless of age, race, origin.
Since music is inextricably part of culture, there have been innumerable variations of it. There is music played with various instruments, music that is sung and those that are danced to. Music knows no boundaries in terms of where and when it is made or expressed. Hence, one of the questions that come to mind is the argument between traditional country music and international music. Which is more important?
The music that one has experienced growing up that has been revered and preserved for centuries is one that is called traditional country music. This is familiar and evokes certain memories in people. Whether good or bad, the nostalgia brought about by this music is one that is close to the heart. It is traditional because it has been handed over by one’s ancestors. It uses local instruments and has sentiments that represent a particular culture or way of life. This music is a symbol of the person one is now and from where one came from. Perhaps this is a reason why people value this type of music.
But there are those persons who have been exposed to other types of music. Due to globalization, there is now unlimited access to different types of music through travel and the internet. People have been able to sample the sounds of other cultures and many have adopted certain sound preferences because of this. Non-traditional and more adventurous individuals have decided to look for different music other than their own. Their view on music shows their taste for a wider perspective and perhaps a hunger to explore more samples of music.
Wherever one’s tastes lie, whether for classical, more homegrown sounds or for experimental, alternative music, one thing remains. Music is here to stay.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 13.1623246493 327% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2406.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 492.0 315.596192385 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89024390244 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71892880833 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463414634146 0.561755894193 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 16.0721442886 205% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0256439947 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9090909091 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9090909091 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.909090909091 7.06120827912 13% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 3.4128256513 498% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344859270287 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106658507816 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063743538161 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201974949291 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635994934555 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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