Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to society and so should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As expected, the public is split over whether employees with expertise, such as doctors, nurses and teachers, should gain a higher salary than those in sports and entertainment. In response to this controversy, some people insist that it is reasonable for personalities in sports and entertainment to earn a lot of money. Contrary to theirs, I firmly believe that professional workers should be paid a considerable remuneration.
Primarily, it is of paramount importance to understand that these professional workers are no less than the most important roles in our daily life. this point would carry great weight, because people tend to ignore them and take their services for granted. For example, someone might consider doctors dispensable when he is healthy and think his favorite football team is essential in his life. However, once he suffers from toothache, he could only turn to doctors. Otherwise, he would be unable to return to his normal life track, not to mention following his football team. Therefore, it is crystal clear that these professional workers are a footstone of functioning social life.
On top of that, it is also significant to come to the realization that the pay of sports and entertainment personalities is not compatible with their contribution sometimes. this argument would unsurprisingly enjoy widespread acceptance among the general public, since the enormous amount of wages of actors, some of whom didn’t make much effort, has astonished the public. For instance, an actress earned millions of dollars every year, which is almost ten times as much as that of a teacher, for her reputation rather than her ability. Thus, it is apparent that to maintain the stability of the society, the salaries should agree with the dedication.
Those who hold the opposite view are based on the belief that sports stars spend a lot of time practicing their skills every day, which deserves a high pay. Indeed, there is a certain amount of truth in their argument, but quite honestly, everyone strives to obtain a better performance in his position. Hence, sports salaries should be compatible with the wages most people earn.
To conclude, while there are some arguments against paying more to professional workers, I am convinced that there are compelling arguments for doing so. In view of this, it is fair to say that professional workers are worth a higher revenue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, honestly, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21282051282 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91030159233 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579487179487 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7529675881 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.944444444 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206340935641 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060290967769 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476737347828 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113012106924 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551205363107 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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