Public celebrations (national days, festivals) are held in many countries. Some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree? Give your reasons and examples according to your knowledge and experience.
In today’s world, most countries have shown great enthusiasm for public celebrations. It is acknowledged that the expense to celebrate these events is really costly. Therefore, controversy exists as to whether the government should pay for these activities or they should spend money on other useful things. From my point of view, I am utterly convinced that the government should invest in other important issues rather than these activities.
To begin with, the most frequent factor contributing to this opinion is that the cost to organize and prepare for national activities is really costly. This is shown by the following example. In Singapore, the government spent a large sum of money to prepare for the National Day Parade. In particular, this expense was up to $39.4 million in 2016. Therefore, national events require a large amount of money spent on which should be used to deal with many more important issues.
In addition, another reason to support this view is that healthcare, which is a heated problem in this day and age, is much more essential in comparison with nationwide days. In fact, people are living under the pressure of the outbreak of Covid-19 disease, spending money on the healthcare system to prevent and cure this disease is undisputed. One example to demonstrate this point is that the government in Singapore has tripled their healthcare expenditure from $4billion to about $12 billion in 2020 to cope with Coronavirus and limit the number of people who are positive with this kind of virus. However, this figure still increases day by day. Consequently, healthcare should receive more funds to improve public health instead of nationwide festivals.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that funds from the government should be used for many necessitous problems, especially healthcare, instead of national days which are extremely expensive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 197, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...y costly. Therefore, controversy exists as to whether the government should pay for these act...
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Line 4, column 467, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a billion'.
Suggestion: a billion
...ipled their healthcare expenditure from billion to about 2 billion in 2020 to cope with...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, may, really, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, in addition, in fact, in particular, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24671052632 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84067146765 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549342105263 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3409137932 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.333333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200575986055 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678885303462 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439247738833 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117679873998 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350244768034 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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