Q6 : Some people prefer to have temporary jobs, which means they only work a few months in a year and use the rest of the time to do what they want. What is your opinion?
Recently, the question of whether temporary occupations are advantageous for individuals has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that working temporarily enables individual people to lead a better life, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that there are a number of advantages that can be derived from working as a part-timer. Perhaps the principal benefit is that part-time workers are less likely to experience high levels of stress given that they are able to quit their occupations with greater ease. In addition, those who are engaged in temporary positions are capable of having an improved standard of living given that companies do not force them to have a tight grasp of their duties in general. This is mainly because the majority of businesses have a predisposition to consider temporary working people to be replaced by permanent workers at any time. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that finding part-time employment is much more beneficial than permanent employment.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that working temporarily merely brings with it positives. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that part-time workers often have difficulty building work experience that will be invaluable in their future careers. As an illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 70% of temporary employees failed to find permanent employment opportunities in the job market in the year 2015. In fact, it turned out that the main reason for this phenomenon was their temporary work experience exerting a detrimental influence on job interviewers. Furthermore, most of the part-timers often struggle to support their living costs since the average wage of part-time employees is much lower than that of full-timers. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in general, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 10.4138276553 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29177718833 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95345196537 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572944297082 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7044372406 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.352941176 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147323997405 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043048559154 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036943070456 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0788645425674 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410358720983 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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