Q16 In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Recently, the issue of the age gap between parents and children has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that although there are some advantages to giving birth to babies at an early age, these are exceeded by the disadvantages, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that having children as early in life as possible exerts a positive influence on families do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that younger parents are more likely to participate in leisure activities with their children, such as football and online games, making it possible for them to build strong relationships with one another. In addition, young people raising their children are easily capable of empathising with their offspring given that not only can they communicate with their children frequently, but they are also more open-minded than older parents who are generally more strict due to the larger generation gap.
My opinion, however, is that the drawbacks of taking responsibility for becoming parents at a young age are more significant. Perhaps the principal disadvantage is that younger parents often have difficulty providing their children with opportunities to receive better education that will be invaluable in their children's future careers considering that they often struggle to support their own living costs. This is mainly because most younger parents have not saved enough money since they have not worked for a long time. Another drawback is that youngsters' personalities can be negatively affected by young individuals looking after their children as the majority of younger parents are incapable of setting a good example to their children due to a lack of life experience. This can even lead their children to become immature or selfish. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the drawbacks of the narrow age gap between parents and children surpass the benefits for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 433, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
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Line 8, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the draw...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26612903226 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79283740031 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556451612903 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.2345450677 49.4020404114 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.6 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169009509265 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566007706635 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466577579625 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108319464458 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204649291994 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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