In recent years, the structure of a family and the role of its member are gradually changing.What kind of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

Essay topics:

In recent years, the structure of a family and the role of its member are gradually changing.
What kind of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

There is sufficient evidence to infer that these days the patterns of a family have greatly diversified. Some if the main changes will be identified and from my observation, these changes can be seen as an advantageous progress.

Families at present have undergone two main differences compared to the past. Firstly, it is undeniable that the average size of the family is reduced. For example, there is the likelihood that a majority of extended families of three generations or more living under the same roof in the 90s in Vietnam have been transformed into the nuclear family with only parents and their children. Another important change is linked to the fact that in the modern society the women lead more independent life, followed by having more than one breadwinner in the family. Nowadays, women have not governed the household task because they have equal opportunities for education and work, which lead to several cases that the men need to assume responsibilities to take care of the children and the housework.

I hold the firm belief that the family and the society can greatly benefit from this tendency. The main positive effect is that the nuclear families have financially stable resource. Therefore, it not only provides young generation with a golden opportunity to approach the high-quality education but also facilitate positively for children’s health. Furthermore, no sooner do women play more important role in the budget of the family than they are able to participate in the essential decision in the family. Hence, women can follow their dream and gain more achievements in their career path.

In conclusion, it is no doubt that there is a revolution in the structure of the family and the right of its members and I am in support of the opinion that this is a profitable development.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advantageous progress'.
Suggestion: advantageous progress
...servation, these changes can be seen as an advantageous progress. Families at present have undergone ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06291390728 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91656448682 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562913907285 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1456263742 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.615384615 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175771533159 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618107570345 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409553072508 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117746922745 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400005331461 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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