As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In fact that people nơ do a little activity which makes by hands, they ever made all without supporting of modern machines I completely agree that people 's health is an impact on lazing exercise owing to electronic inventions.
There are some reasons why their health is an affected on technology modern industry. Everyone usually sitting down many hours in front of a screen of the laptop of television to watch something instead of doing out and playing do sports or feeding animals. Kalos from eating fruit, cereal and meat every day don't use for physical activity leading to they are overweight and are incurred a lot of problems about life. Involved with an obese, the body lost fitting especially the young girl.
Apart from the practical disadvantages, I believe that more and more inventors are created which serve for many aspects of inhabitant's life such as entertainment, work, agriculture and industry. It easily makes them lazy to work the others even though machine's innovation attractive people, games and the Internet for example. Then, they only interest in it and don't care for chores made by hands. They haven't to think to stop it and work the work which inquired much energy, good for their blood and brain. Therefore, they lead to many diseases.
In conclusion, I believe that doing less energy resulting in a negative influence on their health such as the difficulty for sleeping or high blood pressure, although modern types of equipment are instruments make them save time I spend on working another thing.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, therefore, another thing, apart from, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1282.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98832684825 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59926838887 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642023346304 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 400.5 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0179849819 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.545454545 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3636363636 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72727272727 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177279211953 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556185250135 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647568364964 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122297842736 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645144665992 0.056905535591 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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