Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Underdeveloped countries often received a substantial amount of monetary aid from developed countries but it is noteworthy that those nations still suffer destitute agents. In the light of this phenomenon, people think that rich countries had better give other forms of assistance to poorer ones. I completely support this statement and in the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall put forth some explanation for my point of view.
On the one hand, monetary assistance cannot alleviate the deep-rooted problems in developing nations. To clear, if these nations' political environment is unstable, then the money may not reach to right people. In many areas where internal wars or competence in political regimes often happen, the governments will consider buying weapons or training soldiers to be of great priority. Moreover, in such cases that rural people in underprivileged countries do not know how to use the money appropriately and economically, thereby many problems can occur including a higher rate of robbing and scamming.
On the other hand, rich countries should focus on education and healthcare. Firstly, improving the standard of population is linked to the improvement of economic power. Education will help eradicate unemployment and prevent people from resorting to committing crimes or any unlawful actions. With an aim to achieve that, rich countries must spend a large budget to construct schools and vocational institutions. Secondly, healthcare is also equally worth considering. In underdeveloped nations, the proportion of malnutrition children are highly alarming. There are many infectious diseases resulting from a low standard of living in a polluted environment. To tackle this problem, hospitals and doctors are required in these nations, specifically far-flung areas. All of the previous efforts can help stabilize the government and enhance the living standard of citizens.
In conclusion, providing money is not the paramount way to help underprivileged countries. Instead of that, other forms of assistance like improving education and healthcare are of greater importance.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 766, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
... nations, specifically far-flung areas. All of the previous efforts can help stabilize the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66455696203 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17341797398 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620253164557 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1378812296 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4444444444 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237630595561 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619389510223 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839594999584 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131872287828 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780456861514 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.25 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 766, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
... nations, specifically far-flung areas. All of the previous efforts can help stabilize the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66455696203 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17341797398 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620253164557 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1378812296 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4444444444 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237630595561 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619389510223 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839594999584 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131872287828 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780456861514 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.25 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.