Some believe that pupils’ intelligence and social development is more affected by their teachers than their parents. I totally disagree with this belief for some reasons.
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There are several reasons why parents play the main role in their child’s social development and intelligence state. First of all, students spend about 5 to 8 hours a day at school. Therefore, most of their time passes in the company of family at home. Parents allocate this time to children’s upbringing, through playing, watching movies, sharing in house work activities, etc. children also spend the first few years of their lives at home before they attend kindergarden. Whereas these years have an essential role in shaping the personality of children and developing their abilities as well. Hence, they observe their parents behavior as the first role models and they imitate this behaviors when they enter the society.
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Secondly, presence of pupils with different intelligence and social development skills, is another evidence to illustrate the parental influence on their mentality. Although all the students in a single class are learnt the same lessons by the same teacher, they show variegated levels of social development and intelligence, which is doubtlessly rooted in their parental figures. However, the effect of a good teacher can not be ignored. Since different teachers can make different outcomes to the same group of pupil, nevertheless choosing a good school with good teachers for students is another evidence of parents influence on their children’s intelligence and social development.
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To sum up, I personally believe that parents are more influential on children’s intelligence and social development than teachers. There are several reasons for this claim, firstly children mostly spend time with their parents, secondly parents make important decisions of their children’s life which would have deep effects on their behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'hour' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hours'.
Suggestion: hours
...rst of all, students spend about 5 to 8 hour a day at school. therefore, most of the...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...pend about 5 to 8 hour a day at school. therefore, most of their time passes in the compa...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...and developing their abilities as well. Hence they observe their parents behavior as ...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... the first role models and they imitate this behaviors when they enter the society. ...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'class'?
Suggestion: class
.... Although all the students in a single class are learnt the same lessons by the same...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67109634551 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05898712586 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541528239203 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3294380744 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.8 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43025391065 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1565732197 0.084324248473 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111912075437 0.0667982634062 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312193335537 0.151304729494 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069240900919 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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