For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social
development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are different views about whether parents or teachers weight more heavily on
children’s intellectual and interpersonal development. In my standpoint, I believe that
teachers play a vital role in nurturing pupils’ intelligence while parents may have more
influence on the social development of their children.
From the perspective of intellectual development for students, teachers are considered to
be an irreplaceable part of this process. This is due to the fact that they are professionally
trained to help pupils comprehend all complicated knowledge in a logical manner. In
order to be qualified educators, they had gone through a wide range of pedagogical and
psychological courses which brings about sufficient didactic skills to stimulate the
learning process of school children. For instance, although parents may give their
children the final answer to a difficult mathematic question, it is teacher who could
interpret students the appropriate thinking strategy that leads to the right answer.
Additionally, a large portion of brain development takes place at the formative of
adolescence and the fact that children enter school at such age emphasis on the strong
influence of teachers on children’s cognitive ability.
In terms of developing social skills for children, I believe that parents’ role is
indispensable. Apparently, at schools, as there is a limitation of time, teachers give
priority to teaching knowledge rather than soft skills establishment for students. Fathers
and mothers, however, spend more time with their kids; hence, they are able to give
children fundamental moral lessons. Furthermore, by virtue of natural affection between
parents and offspring, it is easier for parents to build up role models for kids to emulate
them and children can simultaneously open up to share their social relationship
experiences to their parents. As a result, parents could provide timely advice on kids’
behaviors and help them build strong sense of community.
In conclusion, while teachers may have greater role in facilitating children’s
comprehensive development, parental involvement can have more impacts on social
skills establishment.
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'skills'' or 'skill's'?
Suggestion: skills'; skill's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'skills'' or 'skill's'?
Suggestion: skills'; skill's
...vement can have more impacts on social skills establishment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89296636086 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3485358792 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584097859327 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.5560678711 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.230769231 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.38176352705 616% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279043033578 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980456451252 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697086502075 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728630702249 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072845529846 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.18 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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