For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligenceand social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence
and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by Minh Hoa on Mon, 09/10/2018 - 02:17

It is true that school children are at an impressionable age, and two strong influences on
their intelligence and social development are teachers and parents. While I accept that
teachers may have more influence on the intelligence of their pupils, I would argue that
parents probably exert a greater influence on the social development of their children.

In terms of encouraging the intellectual development and stimulating the intelligence of
school children, I believe that teachers play the major role. While not all teachers are
capable of inspiring their students, they are trained to impart their knowledge of their
subject areas in challenging and imaginative ways. For example, some students owe their lifelong love of a subject to dedicated teachers who taught this discipline in
secondary school. Of course, at home parents may also reinforce this passion by
encouraging study habits during the formative years of their children. Such support is
vital for academic achievement.

From the perspective of social development, I think that parents are mainly responsible
for guiding their children. Firstly, they spend far more time with their children than any
individual teacher is able to do. They can therefore monitor the activities of children
outside school hours, at weekends and during holidays. Secondly, parents are able to
provide role models in a whole range of situations. These might include showing respect
towards elders, choice of friends, or proper behaviour in public when eating out in
restaurants.

In conclusion, although teachers probably have a greater effect in stimulating the
intelligence of school children, parental influences on the development of children are
stronger in social situations.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, of course, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66917293233 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99278345094 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563909774436 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3704429747 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471416560975 0.244688304435 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165067212209 0.084324248473 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118281269897 0.0667982634062 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134282736619 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112316421735 0.056905535591 197% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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