Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history.some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skill that can help students find a job.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is certainly true that the conventional curriculum become an important part of every schools.However,some people believe that the vocational subjects in schools get more attention that the historical subjects.Indeed, I strongly agree to this statement owing to following reasons
The first and foremost reason is that the vocational training at early age of schooling accelerates the interest of students to choose particular career.For instance, computer classes from the primary level of schools inculcate the interest of students toward computer and later it help them to become computer professionals. Moreover,these vocational training deviates the hesitation of candidate about their aforementioned job in the down run and help them to build a satisfying profession in their life.Thus job-oriented subjects create a better platform for the children than the traditional subjects
Another reason is that the vocational subject in schools curtail the unemployment ratio in a country. Clearly, the ulitimate aim of a student is to get job immediately after schooling. When schools devote their most of time to teach students avout the technical subject it provide immense opportunites for the students to choose a better career. Consequently, every children would be employed and unemployement in job sector will reduce.A recent study conducted by Oxford University in London, for example,disclose that about 80% students in technical students get job after schooling than the students in traditional . Therefore job skills at early school age give good oriented career for the students in their life
However,some people think that conventional curriculum impart traditional knowledge about the country and childrens become more knowledgable about the cultural diversities in various countries.Nevertheless,it donot provide any benefits for the development of better career for the children.So their argument is neither tenable nor robstus.
To conclude, I reiterate the fact that the schools should focus on job oriented subjects which provide a good vision for the children about their future career as well as good professionals for the country.I hope in future schools would take the immediate measures to focus on vocational subjects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1926.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76646706587 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37371016086 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520958083832 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 47.0 20.2975951904 232% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 164.399712001 49.4020404114 333% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 275.142857143 106.682146367 258% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 47.7142857143 20.7667163134 230% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.4285714286 7.06120827912 247% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198985842362 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101829119346 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336135404734 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106983465025 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406323288658 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.6 13.0946893788 226% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 6.85 50.2224549098 14% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 11.3001002004 212% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.07 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.32 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 9.78957915832 332% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.8 10.1190380762 206% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 10.7795591182 278% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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