Shopping is the favourite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that?
Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
More and more young adults are going to shopping in their free time and making it as a new habit. This essay will discuss why they made traveling to shops as a favorite thing to do which includes loss productivity, spending too much money. This essay will also suggest why they need to change their leisure activity which leads to gaining knowledge and develops new skills.
Firstly, teenagers are spending too much of time in a shopping mall which have become a likeable activity. It is majorly due to the introduction of various types of shopping building where they give unique offers and accommodating the need of costumers. Next is it would have an negative effect too like putting weight due to the excess amount of food is being consumed just because the malls offers food which is affordable. For example, in India UKI an organization this is very famous. They built a mall where they have different shops within such as movie theatre, hotels, dressing vendors etc.. Due to these facilities where individuals have the chance to explore and go to variety number of shops. By recording above reason and examples, there is a change in trend where youth prefer going to shopping.
Secondly, it is essential for teenagers to acclimatize to other leisure activities like: listening to music, going to gym. In fact, music will reduce the stress levels plus certain type of songs would also empower one’s motivational levels. In addition, exercising would greatly reduce body fat, develops brain function. For example, recent studies suggest that more than 20% of the adolescent aged people has shown significant rise in their productivity levels after introducing a activities. Therefore, individual should not stick too one type of activity they need to change it.
To sum up, going to shopping with their peers have become a favorite activity. This essay discussed why teenage people prefer going to shops and their effects. This essay also suggested why young adults need to adopt to different free time activity which is advantageous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in fact, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10324483776 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59896235786 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548672566372 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2952548947 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1111111111 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133375761303 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426173936492 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322481191477 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0830505540374 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253615386738 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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