The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often claimed that forbidding all types of marketing is beneficial to the society as it is of no use, and it can be even harmful. While I think that some of the adverts are incompatible, governments should not put a ban on it.
On the one hand, it cannot be denied that publicity sometimes can exert pernicious impacts upon the community . Firstly, manufacturers are now step-by-step commercializing their commodity by inviting celebrities to publicize their brand names. Furthermore, people are bombarded with so many adverts and some broadcasting propaganda and leaflets contain unsuited contents as well as sex and violent images which will do harm to teenagers. Finally, children will put pressure on parents to purchase them their products. For instance, children easily believe in marketing strategies such as attractive images, false information of the quality used by sweet companies to entice them to buy.
On the other hand, authorities should not prohibit the proclamation for a variety of reasons. First of all, it is a creative industry that call for employment. A great number of people are pursuing careers related to drawing or architecting. Moreover, advertisement is a key part of modern business. It informs us about choices we have so the companies can approach prospective customers and we can meet our demands. Therefore, without trade, there will be a decline in profit. Finally, people pay for products not just depending on adverts but also on many good reasons including quality and their needs. For example, parents want to buy advantageous learning tools such as alphabet, electronic dictionary through television.
In conclusion, although advertisement is sometimes not suitable for public, it should not be banned for some reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30604982206 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09202981191 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629893238434 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5782017566 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1875 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.875 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130683378034 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411348826855 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591375430235 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0994170954174 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064276276847 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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