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Some argue that all young children should be required to stay with full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: Some argue that all young children should be required to stay with full-time education until they are at least 18 years old. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is claimed that teenagers should become full-time students until they reach at least 18 years old. In my opinion, I disagree with this point of view.

Those proponents in favor of such view do believe that the main reason why schoolchildren should learn at school all day long is that the more time they spend on studying, the more useful knowledge they could gain, the more success they have once they enter the world of works. Nevertheless, I refute this perspective, seeing that besides knowledge gained at classroom context, other hands-on experience and social skills, which are seldom attain if children take so long to stay at school, are much more crucial, especially with their future career path. For instance, it is true that managers wouldnot recruite those job hunters who have no team spirit and public speaking skill, in spite of the fact that they have in-depth knowledge in their field.

Moreover, apart from school career, children have right to indulge in their favourite hobbies and appreciate sentimental value. It stands to reason that more and more students in this day and age have been put under enormous pressure, including from school, peers, and even their parents' expectations. Consequently, they could easily suffer psychological problems since they devote considerable time to stay at school and have less time to spend on other leisure pursuits, which could help them put their mind at ease and their interpersonal relationship could be lost gradually in default of bond time. If, for example, schoolchildren are forced to learn all day long without any spare time for spiritual comforts, then it is highly likely that they would suffer from stress or even intend to commit suicide and their special bond with other family members could be undermined due to the lack of family time.

In conclusion, I disagree with the stance that full-time education until children are at least 18 years old ought to be required in educational settings.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, apart from, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in spite of, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07975460123 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59742603419 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573619631902 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.7368065652 49.4020404114 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.6 106.682146367 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6 20.7667163134 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.3 7.06120827912 231% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326356993161 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14948950286 0.084324248473 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156800186164 0.0667982634062 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287383789862 0.151304729494 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.160090115282 0.056905535591 281% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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