Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.
Why is this the case?
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
In this modern era, children are glued to the phone screen all day. It is easy for us to come across them spending hours using this popular mobile device. The explanation for this issue is that children do not prefer to be active and they are introverts. In my opinion, this problem is considered a negative development. In this essay, I will explain the cause of two main culprits.
In fact, it is deniable that children are really keen on using phones as they are not the type sporty people accompanying with an introvert tendency. The first point I want to make for this case is that children are not really interested in outdoor activities. They are more prone to intriguing videos for kids than sparing their time playing sports just to be fit. For example, we rarely catch children playing in the park during weekdays. In addition, youngsters have a tendency to be introverts. In this case, they are not phone addicts but shyness prevents them from making friends. Evidently, there are some introverted children browsing the Internet or wandering around the house just to kill time.
In my perspective, it is a really negative development that children spend the majority of their time on the phones as it can result in harmful effect. The first one is that adolescents’eyesight are inevitably affected badly by the light’s phone screen. Undoubtedly, most teenagers now wear glasses. Additionally, they lose the chance to improve their social skills, especially communicational skill. This should be taken into consideration for the reason that if they do not spare time to do physical activities outside, they are unlikely to get fit as well as being deactive.
In conclusion, wasting time on phones is a significant issue due to the fact that children barely have interest in sports following with the introvert nature. This can lead to catastrophic effect that can make children be near-sighted or not making the most of opportunities to enhance necessary skills for life. Because of that, parents should coordinate with school to tackle this issue before it is too late
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...plain the cause of two main culprits. In fact, it is deniable that children are ...
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Line 4, column 254, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the opportunities') or simply say ''most opportunities''.
Suggestion: most of the opportunities; most opportunities
...ldren be near-sighted or not making the most of opportunities to enhance necessary skills for life. B...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98853868195 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8997162984 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558739255014 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7116807025 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.05 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.45 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224386381667 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704869132689 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494547166782 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147150479121 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569427389735 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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