Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is said that the majority of children in the modern days have a tendency to live such an unhealthy lifestyle. For that, their parents as well as schools are believed to be responsible for this annoying problem. In my own opinion, it is not only the parental and educational responsibility but children are also be related to taking some remedies for what they do to themselves.
To begin with, children are under control of their parents following with schools so when it comes to misbehaviors, these people play such a huge role in educating the child to become a better person. In fact, parents don’t pay enough attention to their child due to the fact that they are so busy with their work resulting in the realization of turning into a different person with a not-so-good lifestyle of the child. Besides, schools are so focused on academic subjects with subjective opinions but they don’t provide any helpful knowledge to children in order to remind them to live healthily. That’s the reason why parents and schools need to be supportive to make changes to children’s thinking.
However, children should know that their parents as well as schools are not the only causes for the way they live unhealthily but they are also the root of this problem. Undoubtedly, they don’t have such an adequate consciousness to protect themselves from danger for the reason that they are so young. Although some people will make excuses that it is the fault of parents and schools for not explaining how to get away from those bad habits, children have to learn those harsh lessons themselves and of course, not by studying in class or having a conversation with their parents. It is a process of self-awareness and make foundation for their adulthood. For that, children have to be mature to differentiate junk food covered in temporary and harmful “benefits”. Besides, they have to realize that they can’t rely on parents or schools to teach them everything as it is impossible. Instead of that, they should get some experiences from so many people in real life who share the same stories as them.
In conclusion, it is necessary for parents and schools to give an explantion to children on why people desire to have a good health to form a happy life whereas children should follow their advice to not make the same mistake again.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to not make the same mistake again.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, well, whereas, in conclusion, in fact, of course, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1952.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 401.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86783042394 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75448798503 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483790523691 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.0961872343 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.133333333 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7333333333 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297212976299 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113420795582 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531952893448 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199547513455 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684767735418 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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